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1. **原文**: I have a young sister, she often cries.
  **改正**: I have a younger sister who often cries.
  **解释**: 使用“younger sister”更准确地指代“小妹妹”，并且使用关系代词“who”连接两个句子，使句子更流畅。

2. **原文**: Almost every day, she cries once.
  **改正**: Almost every day, she has a crying spell.
  **解释**: “has a crying spell”比“cries once”更自然地表达“哭一场”的意思。

3. **原文**: Sometimes, she has no reason to cry, but if matter happens to her actually, she will cry without stop.
  **改正**: Sometimes, she cries for no reason at all, but when something actually happens, she cries uncontrollably.
  **解释**: “for no reason at all”和“cries uncontrollably”是更自然的表达方式。

4. **原文**: she is a lovely and pretty girl, but nobody like listening her cry.
  **改正**: She is a lovely and pretty girl, but nobody likes listening to her cry.
  **解释**: “likes listening to”正确使用动名词和介词。

5. **原文**: On a Saturday, That we played in the zoo were too late back home.
  **改正**: One Saturday, we stayed at the zoo so late that we got home very late.
  **解释**: 原句结构混乱，改为更清晰的表述。

6. **原文**: Everyone in family were so hungry
  **改正**: Everyone in the family was so hungry
  **解释**: “in the family”是正确的表达，“was”是正确的谓语单数形式。

7. **原文**: a short time, we have eaten all food.
  **改正**: In a short time, we had eaten all the food.
  **解释**: 使用“In a short time”作时间状语，并且使用过去完成时态“had eaten”。

8. **原文**: I rushed into the kitchen at once and took a bottle of water to drink fully mouth.
  **改正**: I immediately rushed into the kitchen and took a bottle of water, drinking it greedily.
  **解释**: “immediately”比“at once”更自然，“drinking it greedily”比“drink fully mouth”更准确地描述喝水的动作。

9. **原文**: I didn’t know at that time,there was only a bottle of water in my family.
  **改正**: I didn’t know at that time that there was only one bottle of water left in the house.
  **解释**: “left in the house”比“in my family”更合适地描述水的位置。

10. **原文**: My sister felt thirsty too ,later and wanted to drink.
   **改正**: Later, my sister also became thirsty and wanted to drink.
   **解释**: 调整句子顺序和表述使其更流畅。

11. **原文**: I found about in my home , there was no water in my family.
   **改正**: I searched our home and found that there was no water left.
   **解释**: “searched our home”和“there was no water left”更自然和准确。

12. **原文**: Suddenly, ‘the rainer’began to rain.
   **改正**: Suddenly, 'the rainer' started her 'rain'.
   **解释**: 为了保持原文的比喻和幽默感，“started her 'rain'”可能是更贴切的表达。


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